IS there equal opportunities for all ? the article ‘’An education in citizenship “ by the Chicago Tribute (editorial 31 march ,2003 ) stated the question .Acouring to the article the Illinois House r passed a bill to allow iligal young people to pay in state tution rates at the Illinois colleges and universities I agree with thee proposal because for many of them their main priority is to resive a highter education .
Advocate for immigrant estimate there are 3000 youth in illinous who are in this position . in which there were born I n another country but raise in the USA the tuition fee shouldn’t be as an outside state ($13.906) because as the advocate for immigrant stated their parents paid federal taxes . the true of the matter is the cost of a highter education is not about money but the hard effort everybody put to be able to achive their goal to become somebody .
Another example is the bill resive 112 -4 votes to passed it in that most senators didn’t had problem to decide althought the bill have a lot of pros and cons the dilemma have been brought to the atteintion of the representive by the continuously protest young people who are illegal immigrant to make the bill pass
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11 years ago
Hello,I didn't find your revised essay. So I'm going to be giving you feedback on this one.
ReplyDeleteYour introductory sentence was good I just think you could have re worded it a little better.The publication information is incorrect It should be Chicago Tribune not Tribute you could loose points for that come the day of the exam. The summary was okay could have added alittle more. You did however state what you agreed with from the article but didn't give your own examples or evidence. This essay for your body paragraphs lacked all evidence and examples you used alot of details from the passage which shouldn't be used during that part of the essay it should be an opinion and is missing a conlusion.